沪江英语绿宝书之2010年12月大学英语四级考试 作文范文及解析

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沪江英语绿宝书之2010年12月大学英语四级考试 作文范文及解析

　　How Should Parents Help Children to be Independent
　　Nowadays, there is a growing concern over such a phenomenon, that is, some parents take care of almost everything concerned with their children, including study, work, marriage. Some parents believe that this is love, however, it is only to destroy children’s independence thoroughly。
　　For the future of the next generation, more efforts should be made by parents to help their children to be independent. The fundamental one is to cultivate the awareness, namely, the importance and necessity of being independent, which is supposed to begin from childhood. Children should be taught that no one can be stronger and more helpful than themselves in this world。
　　The quality of independence is so indispensable for us that parents had better act as a tutor, not a dictator. And only with parent’s trust, can the next generation accumulate confidence step by step。
　　今年的作文主题非常贴近考生的生活，给了考生很大的发挥空间，擅长写日常生活细节的学生可以写上三五个句子勾勒父母对于子女的过度关爱，而擅长逻辑思考的学生则可以更多地阐述父母怎样的行为才可以培养子女独立的品格，而过度宠爱正导致了独立精神的消失。
　　从具体操作的角度来说，对于基础较为薄弱的考生，这次的考试题目是比较容易套用模板的，第一段，把现实状况描述清楚；第二段，写清楚父母亲帮助子女独立的策略；第三段，呼吁父母亲多给自己一些自由。怎样解决(解决方案的优缺点)
　　沪江考前模板专题里面关于解决问题类作文提到了类似的结构：
　　In recent days, we have to face a problem-----A, which is becoming more and more serious. ----(说明A的现状)。
　　Confronted with A, we should take a series of effective measures to cope with the situation. For one thing, ---------------(解决方法一). For another -------------(解决方法二). Finally, --------------(解决方法三)。
　　Personally, I believe that -------------(我的解决方法). Consequently, I’m confident that a bright future is awaiting us because --------------(带来的好处)。
　　像这样子的模板能够帮助无话可说，或者说英语表达能力比较弱的同学迅速找到思路，只需要填入关键的字词就可以完成作文。
　　但是对于能够用流畅的英语表达自己的思路的同学来说，写作如果希望取得比较高的分数，则需要注意语言必须尽可能简洁才能够在规定字数以内说清楚自己的论点，而句子的表达要求，也从有话可说，上升到言之有理，甚至上升到语言精致优美，内在逻辑严密的高度了。
　　在我们给出大家的这篇范文里面，三段文字结构清晰，语言简明优美又没有落入模板的窠臼，属于在临场作文中的优秀之作。